User talk:Darkness/Sandbox

Wikiexclusive
So...I hate to sound mean, but...I'm not sure where you're going with this. You don't really have a clear point to it, so I was a little lost while reading it. You need to more clearly emphasize the message you're trying to get across to readers, because all I could gather from it was that it was about the villains. At first I thought you were going for "what if the villain wasn't just pure evil and it was hard to hate them?" but as it continued, I wasn't sure if even that was the point. That would be a good place to start improving: clearly state the object of the article and all the support points. If you do that, I can better help you organize it. Apart from that, there's also minor errors like spelling, grammar, punctuation, etc., but those aren't a big deal. What's important is that it can be understood. If you like, I can proofread it for you to help you fix the minor errors, even. Glad to see someone interested in writing wikiexclusives! It's been a long time since we had one, so I'm eager to see some new material turn out. I'm even thinking of writing one, myself, soon. So keep at it! 04:52, 19 December 2012 (UTC)