User talk:Purlo's Grandfather/Temple of Time

Up-Front Critique
It's a very interesting topic, one that a lot of users and Zelda enthusiasts alike will eat up, for sure. Two things though: (1) the content itself is a bit short, and (2) reads like test answers for an essay portion of an exam. The encouraged length of a WikiExclusive is standard essay style at a minimum (5 paragraphs, 6-10 sentences per paragraph). Of course that's just a guideline, but yours, though concise and clear, runs more like a blurb than an actual article. Fluff it up; there are always ways to explain concepts deeper, and especially with so much personal theory behind this one, the more accurately you are able to describe your theory to the reader, the easier the reader will understand it! As for the "test answers"-vibe I get from this, to make it more like an article or theory discussion, turn the three questions you have above into an introduction with a thesis. No critiques about the actual content though, which is great - interesting topic; I'd be interested to see the final outcome! 19:14, 23 December 2010 (EST)
 * That looks great! It looks much more like an article now! I liked it before, but with the presentation the way it is now, it looks very professional! If you wish, I can submit it to the staff, unless you'd like to make extra tweaks. :) 11:30, 24 December 2010 (EST)